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The more I’m loving revision. 

This too shall pass, my son.

I switched one chapter from Ven’s point of view to Tita’s, and I love the way it works now.  A bunch of stuff is better-explained than before.  The only downside is that I had to give up on the closing image of the chapter, but, on balance, that may be good as well; the new chapter close seems to have a lot more movement in it, despite conveying the same events in the same order.  The magic of POV..