Updates to Knave of Yes
The CSGJAC workshop reviewed the first chapter of Knave and handed me a thick pile of feedback, much positive, much substantive. Jeff Carver in particular is a very careful reader and editor, and I incorporated nearly all of his recommendations in a further draft. I thought I’d update the spreadsheet after this round:
There was some consensus that the first chapter was too long, which surprised me; it’s now shorter by about five pages, and much tighter. The chart shows that I’ve dropped a couple of chapters since the last pic; the Works chapter went away during the Great Funicular Purge, and the Moonlight chapter, always too short, got shorter and wound up part of the Mothers chapter.
Big question: if Chapter 1 was too long at ~7500 words, how will people react to chapter 8?
